（写作内容）

1. 用约30个词概括上述信息的主要内容；

2. 简要谈谈父母教育方式的重要性；

3. 谈谈你理想中的父母教育方式。（上述对话仅供参考）

（写作要求）

1. 写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；

2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；

3. 不必写标题。

（评分标准）

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。

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【答案】Most of the students enjoy a harmonious family atmosphere with equal treatment. However, about 16% of the parents expect too much of their children and some are even hard on them.

The importance of family education cannot be stressed too much. It’s well known that the family is a person’s first school, where parents are the first teachers. Proper family education is always in the fundamental position, which plays a very important role in shaping a child’s growth and development.

In my opinion, the ideal family educational mode should be the one that adopts the scientific method of encouragement, guidance, and tolerance. Parents should pay great attention to emotional communication by sparing time to talk with children, listen attentively to their aspirations and give them encouragement. Only in this way can children build self-respect and self-confidence and develop their physical and mental health.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于图表作文，饼状图展示出某校学生父母教育方式现状的网络调查，以及一部分相关文字，要求考生写一篇文章概括上述信息的主要内容，简要谈谈父母教育方式的重要性及考生理想中的父母教育方式。

第一步：审题

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。

要求：1. 用约30个词概括上述信息的主要内容；2. 简要谈谈父母教育方式的重要性；3.谈谈你理想中的父母教育方式。

注意：1. 写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；3.不必写标题。

分析图表：本篇书面表达旨在要求考生准确理解并阐述一个被分割成大小不等切片的饼状图所传达的信息。考生应清楚掌握部分与整体，部分与部分之间的相互关系，这种关系通常是以百分比的数字形式给出的。饼状图反映了某校学生父母教育方式现状调查结果，从饼状图中我们可以看出和谐相处的占比39%，平等对待的占比31%，过高期望的占比16%，苛刻要求的占比11%，其他的占比3%，可以得出结论，大多数学生享有平等待遇的和谐家庭气氛。然而，约有16%的家长对孩子期望过高，有些甚至对他们很苛刻。考生需要用约30个词概括上述信息的主要内容。

第二步：列提纲（重点词组及图表类作文常用表达）

重点词组

harmonious; atmosphere; equal treatment; expect; be hard on sb.; be well known; proper family education; fundamental; play a very important role in doing sth.; growth; in one’s opinion; ideal; educational mode; adopt; scientific; guidance; tolerance; pay attention to; emotional communication; spare time to do; talk with sb.; attentively; aspiration; build self-respect; self-confidence; develop one’s physical and mental health

图表类作文常用表达

1. 数据分析常用：

（1）the number of...is more than/over...

（2）the amount of...increases/grows/rises/goes up to.../by...

（3）the number of...is similar to/almost the same as/smaller than/below...

（4）the amount of...is quite different from.../decreases/falls/drops from...to...

2. 结论或预测常用：

From the figures/statistics above,

We can conclude/draw a conclusion that...

We can estimate that the population/amount of...will increase/drop steadily/gradually/rapidly...

第三步：连词成句

1. Most of the students enjoy a harmonious family atmosphere with equal treatment.

2. However, about 16% of the parents expect too much of their children and some are even hard on them.

3. The importance of family education cannot be stressed too much.

4. It’s well known that the family is a person's first school, where parents are the first teachers.

5. Proper family education is always in the fundamental position, which plays a very important role in shaping a child’s growth and development.

6. In my opinion, the ideal family educational mode should be the one that adopts the scientific method of encouragement, guidance, and tolerance.

7. Parents should pay great attention to emotional communication by sparing time to talk with children, listen attentively to their aspirations and give them encouragement.

8. Only in this way can children build self-respect and self-confidence and develop their physical and mental health.

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1. 表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second……, And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2. 表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3. 表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand…, Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4. 表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改