Campus security has recently attracted wide public attention. In order to ensure the safety of teachers and students, our school prohibits strangers, students’ parents included, from entering the campus at will. This rule has aroused a strong response from parents. For this reason, our school has recently conducted a public opinion survey among students on whether parents should enter campus. The results of the survey are as follows.

（写作内容）

1.用约30个单词概括阅读材料的主要内容；

2.用约120个单词简要描述图中的信息(包括人数比率、观点及原因)；并就“家长该不该进校园”谈谈你的看法和理由。

（写作要求）

1.可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2.不必写标题；

3.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

（评分标准）

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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【答案】Possible version 1 (不赞同):

To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents. So a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included.

According to the survey, 60% of the students think parents should be included because it is a rule everyone should obey. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone. However, the rest think the guards can make a proper decision depending on certain situations.

Personally, I agree with most students. As the saying goes, “Prevention is better than cure.” Proper measures should be taken before it’s too late. As for parents, they have some other ways to keep in touch with their children, like making calls or asking for teachers’ help. All in all, campus security calls for everyone’s concern and cooperation.

Possible version 2 (不赞同):

To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents. So a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included.

According to the survey, 60% of the students think parents should be included because it is a rule everyone should obey. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone. However, the rest think the guards can make a proper decision depending on certain situations.

I agree parents can enter campus according to the actual situation. For example, if parents come to school at the request of their children who need any help, or at the invitation of the school, the head teacher or the subject teacher to exchange information about their children’s learning, then I think the guard should let the parents into campus after contacting the relevant personnel and registering the parents’ identity information.

【解析】

这是一篇读写类作文。要求考生先用30个字左右概括阅读材料，简要描述图中信息，并就“家长该不该进校园”发表自己的观点并阐明理由。概括短文内容应用第三人称。全文主要时态是一般现在时。

第一步：审题

体裁：读写类作文

时态：概括短文内容应用第三人称。全文主要时态是一般现在时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

写作要点：1.用约30字概括阅读材料内容。

（1） 为了安全起见，学校禁止陌生人包括家长进入校园，这在家长之间产生了一些热议。

（2） 因为这些热议，学校进行了一些调查。

2.简要描述图中信息，比如人数比率、观点及原因等。

3.就“家长该不该进校”发表自己的观点和理由（赞成或反对）。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

be banned from；bring about heated discussions

subscribe to the view；there is no need；be a danger to；depending on certain situations；agree with；keep in touch with；call for（不赞成父母进校）

at the request of; at the invitation of;（不赞成禁止父母进校）

第三步：连词成句

1. To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents.

2. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone.

3. As the saying goes, “Prevention is better than cure.”(不赞成父母进学校)

4. All in all, campus security calls for everyone’s concern and cooperation.（不赞成禁止父母进学校）

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改