【题目】假定你是李华,正是英国牛津参加短期语言培训,计划星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上一则广告引起了你的注意,但一些具体信息不明确(箭头所指内容)。请给该旅行社发一封电子邮件,询问有关情况。

注意:
1. 词数100左右,信的开头和结尾已为你写好。
2. 可根据内容要点适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
3. 参考词汇: 牛津------ Oxford 费用------ fee
Dear Sir/Madame,
I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.
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Yours,
Li hua
在线课程【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Sir/Madame,
I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.
As a student at Oxford University, I’d like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?
How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my lessons for the nest day, I’d like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.
Yours,
Li hua
【解析】
试题分析:本篇书面表达是一篇提纲作文。提纲作文写作的时候注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;语言表达要符合英语习惯。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点。
【亮点说明】本篇电子邮件语言简练,结构紧凑,层次分明,内容要点完整,符合本类文体的要求。而且使用了很多短语和结构。比如As for、cover the entrance, have a look at 等。此外,文章还使用了Besides这样的副词使文章内容更具有层次感,也使内容更加连贯。