1、说明兼职原因； 2、阐述自身优势； 3、渴望得到兼职。

注意:字数要求 100 字左右。开头与结尾已经给出，不算进总字数；可以适当发挥。

Dear Sir,

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Yours,

Li Hua

【答案】Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua, a middle school student in Shantou. I’m writing to apply for the position of the tour guide for Shantou One-day Trip.

I long to be a guide for the reason that it helps a lot to enrich my life experience. What’s more, it does good to my oral English since with the rapid development of tourism, more and more foreigners visit Shantou. And I am fully convinced that I’m qualified for the post. First of all , I have no difficulty communicating with English-speaking people fluently and effectively. Additionally, it is for16 years that I have been living here so that I am familiar with many places of interest in Shantou, which is my super advantage to introduce more than books to foreigners. Last but not least, I am a person of responsibility and enthusiasm.

I am sure I can perform my job excellently. I would be grateful if you could consider my application and offer me the opportunity to serve your company as a part-time worker.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

这篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封申请信。

第一步：审题。审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过审题我们可以确定几个方面的信息。第一1、说明兼职原因； 2、得阐述自身优势； 3、渴望到兼职。第二，写作人称为第一人称。第三，时态为一般现在时。

第二步：布局段落，确定主要段落，次要段落，段落数量。这篇写作段落数量为四段。第一段申请岗位 。第二段，1、说明兼职原因； 2、阐述自身优势；第三段，渴望得到兼职。第四段，期待回复。其中第二段为重点段落。

第三步：确定关键词汇和短语：enrich my life experience，oral English，be qualified for, communicate with ,fluently ,effectively, be familiar with, places of interest , responsibility, enthusiasm, excellently, serve .

第四步：确定较为高级的句子:I long to be a guide for the reason that it helps a lot to enrich my life experience. I am fully convinced that I’m qualified for the post. I have no difficulty communicating with English-speaking people fluently and effectively. it is for16 years that I have been living here so that I am familiar with many places of interest in Shantou, which is my super advantage to introduce more than books to foreigners.

第五步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接:What’s more, And ,First of all, Additionally .

第六步：注意书写，保持卷面整洁，避免划线，乱擦。

【亮点说明】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式如:I long to be a guide for the reason that it helps a lot to enrich my life experience. I am fully convinced that I’m qualified for the post. I have no difficulty communicating with English-speaking people fluently and effectively. it is for16 years that I have been living here so that I am familiar with many places of interest in Shantou, which is my super advantage to introduce more than books to foreigners.

高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次。整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。